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如何才能写出这样的雅思9分作文

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中國人写的雅思作文有布局但说话不敷隧道;native speaker写的文章够隧道,但不敷雅思!是以,市道市情上总找不到“完善”的便秘治療,雅思例文。

这次,我出格约请我的美國朋侪(一样钻研和传授雅思)“依照我的请求”写了一些文章,这里一一贴出来,讓大师分享一下:

Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you a灶台清潔,gree or disagree? Some feel that the children of low income families are better equipped to deal with difficulties posed by the ‘real world’ when they grow up and they also believe the privileged children of wealthy families are less fit to deal with these difficulties . The implications and veracity of this argument seem self-evident, but in fact require closer examination.( 58words )

真人21點,點评:

1+ 1 ’ 模式,最後 1 句為主题句。此段的主题句略微有點特别,它简直否認了前面所提到的概念,从而表达出了本身的概念,别的還引出了下文。

出格是最後半句:but in fact require closer examination ,感受是在抛砖引玉。

The popular wisdom is that children of poorer families learn early on the value of a buck, and are thus naturally better suited to stretching moneywhen times get tough in adulthood. Inversely, the children of wealthy families, thoseborn with a silver spoon in their支票借款, mouths, are believed to be completely ignorant of the value of money, having had everything provided for them in their youth and oftentimes erroneously expecting the same situation in adulthood. They are believed to be prone to overspending and financial irresponsibility. This belief, though logical, overlooks one key point which is , of course, education. (100words)

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1 ’ +3 模式,第 1 句是主题句。请注重,从此段的内容来看,这是个妥协段(即阐發本身其实不同意的概念)。固然 4 段論的作文的主體段是两面會商,可是小编仍是喜好如许的写作,即主體段的概念仍是有偏重的,把妥协段放在前面,最後 1 句话引出下一段,如许過分地很天然,并且本身的概念也比力明白!

The basis of this argument is , of course, knowing the value of money, and the idea that children of the poor know this, and those of the wealthy do not . Who though, is in a better position to teach their children the value of money; someone skilled in earning and keeping it, the wealthy parent, or someone who can not seem to acquire it, the poor parent? Both wealthy and poor children are equally likely to acquire an education in money, whether it is formal, or in the school of hard knocks. Conversely, both children are as likely to ignore this education. (101words)

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这段的内容感受写得不敷直接,仍是在阐發對方概念的缝隙!请注重,前面妥协段已这麼写過了,那末这一段最佳是正面地論證本身的概念,如许从内容上来讲更 convincing 一點!

别的,必要阐明的是,大师發明作者的内容仍是有必定深度,可是这是要有必定的英语功底才行的!若是英语功底不可的话,建议内容不要写太深,由于那样轻易造成考官看不懂你在说甚麼!

A poor child may believe that one can get along, if not as easily, without wealth. A wealthy child may be well trained by a parent steeped in the knowledge of money management; the key to developing this skill is education.

點评:最後一段有點像是提出解决这个问题的法子,即 education. 它没有像传统的末端段那样简略的重申本身的概念。

最後总结:

全文的概念有待琢磨,作者很较着是不同意标题的说法,即 Children who grow up in families which are short of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children who are brought up by wealthy parents.可是作者本身是更方向贫民家的孩子呢,仍是富人家的孩子呢?!按照文章来看,作者是中立,他所垂青的是他们所接管的教诲。

In other words,整篇文章又是一次中立的写法。在雅思测验中,这类写法常常利用,仍是很是适用的,大师可以進修一下。

别的,文章中有不少好词好句,出格是长句,值得仿照一下,此篇9分雅思作文。
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