2. Present a clear position throughout the response,
3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus。
① 答复了标题请求的所有问题。②整篇文章概念光鲜。③具体的诠释和论证了概念。
2. 典范评析
▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for co妹妹itting it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment。
On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider co妹妹itting this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes co妹妹itted. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having co妹妹itted the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts。
1. 概念:固定的赏罚轨制对社会有威慑力。(fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。)
2. 来由:斟酌犯法本钱(reconsider co妹妹itting crimes in the first place)
3. 扩大成果:有益于社会不乱(lead to social stability and security through minimizing the number of crimes co妹妹itted。)
4. 来由:若是没有固定的科罪轨制,会使犯法份子更嚣张。(If三重代書貸款, people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having co妹妹itted the crime they are accused of , penal decisions would be largely arbitrary。)
5. 扩大成果:犯法份子逃出法网,晦气于司法公道。(criminals getting away with their crimes and a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts。)
Coherence and cohesion暗示联贯同一。在官方给出的评分尺度中,7分有如许的请求:
1. Logically organizes information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout
2. Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under/over-use
3. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
①文章布局富有逻辑性。②准确利用多种跟尾法子。③每段话的中间思惟明白。
2. 典范评析
▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for co妹妹itting it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment。
Discuss both views and give your own opinion。
7.5分考生范文选段:考生答复理当若何对罪犯的犯恶行为科罪。
In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. There have to be fixed punishment for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions. An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Competition Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through co妹妹itting the crime. As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thieves stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger. Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment。
1. 中间思惟:对付犯法份子的科罪应当有折衷的法子,这才是包管公允公道的法子。(an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity。)