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如今的年青人老是会发出“抱负很饱满，实际很骨感”如许的感慨，来表达对实际糊口的无奈。而在雅思写作测验中，考生们又未尝不会履历这类无奈呢?写作7分是很多考生求之不得的分数，但即便是一些外籍西席所撰写的范文，在考官笔下也不外是7-8分!对付@海%U13g1%内大大%cvtHD%都@雅思虑生而言，7分彷佛是可望而不成及的。那末，事实怎么的文章，才能获得考官的青睐，终极荣幸的获得7分的分数呢?
一.Task response
1. 详细请求
Task response暗示使命的完成。在官方给出的评分尺度中，7分有如许的请求：
1. Address all parts of the task,
2. Present a clear position throughout the response,
3. Present, extend and support main ideas, but there may be a tendency to over-generalize and/or supporting ideas may lack focus。
① 答复了标题请求的所有问题。②整篇文章概念光鲜。③具体的诠释和论证了概念。
2. 典范评析
▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for co妹妹itting it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment。
Discuss both views and give your own opinion。
1. 考生必要对标题中的两个相反的概念举行阐发，不克不及只阐发本身偏向的概念。即：固定稳定的科罪轨制有何感化;根据犯法念头和情况机动的科罪轨制有何感化。
2. 考生必要很是清晰的表白本身的概念，即答复理当若何对罪犯的犯恶行为科罪。
3. 考生对付标题中两个相反概念的阐发必要摆出充沛的论据，提出本身的来由并经由过程例子来证实。
7.5分考生范文选段：对固定稳定的科罪轨制的阐发
On the one hand, fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society. ‖Individuals knowing that they will be subject to a certain punishment if they are convicted with a given crime will reconsider co妹妹itting this act in the first place. ‖This deterring effect also leads to social stability and security, through minimizing the number of crimes co妹妹itted. ‖If people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having co妹妹itted the crime they are accused of, penal decisions would be largely arbitrary. This would result into criminals getting away with their crimes and into a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts。
1. 概念：固定的赏罚轨制对社会有威慑力。(fixed punishment will have a deterring effect on society。)
2. 来由：斟酌犯法本钱(reconsider co妹妹itting crimes in the first place)
3. 扩大成果：有益于社会不乱(lead to social stability and security through minimizing the number of crimes co妹妹itted。)
4. 来由：若是没有固定的科罪轨制，会使犯法份子更嚣张。(If三重代書貸款, people knew they would be able to convince the court or the jury of reason for having co妹妹itted the crime they are accused of , penal decisions would be largely arbitrary。)
5. 扩大成果：犯法份子逃出法网，晦气于司法公道。(criminals getting away with their crimes and a high level of injustice caused by the subjective approach of different courts。)
3. 对策
茵蝶, ① 温习真题，找生词
在考题中，常常呈现焦点辞汇的反复，好比：distance learning, criminal等。建议考生们可以在温习写作时，先把近两年的写作标题过一遍，查查生词。如许做可以大大低落考生在作文题中遭受生词的为难，提高审题的正确性。
②把握分歧题型高文文的写作重点
概念类：可以支撑、否决、中立，必定要表达本身的概念。论据要充实，举例不成或缺。
阐发解决类：所问即所答，重点阐发缘由，解决法子多角度。
③八鬼话题，重点冲破
在考题中，“教诲，科技，环保，全世界化，当局，媒体，事情，社会糊口”为常考的八鬼话题。温习重点有如下几方面：1. 每一个话题的焦点辞汇要烂熟于心。2. 每一个话题要堆集最少两个可以作举例论证的实例。3. 每一个话题最少选择两道标题做brainstorming思绪拓展操练。4. 每一个话题要最少堆集两篇范文。5. 每一个考生对本身不认识的话题，要增强以上操练。
二. Coherence and cohesion
1. 详细请求
Coherence and cohesion暗示联贯同一。在官方给出的评分尺度中，7分有如许的请求：
1. Logically organizes information and ideas; there is a clear progression throughout
2. Uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under/over-use
3. Presents a clear central topic within each paragraph
①文章布局富有逻辑性。②准确利用多种跟尾法子。③每段话的中间思惟明白。
2. 典范评析
▲ 剑桥雅思全真试题7 Test2 Task2
Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for co妹妹itting it, should be taken into account when deciding the punishment。
Discuss both views and give your own opinion。
7.5分考生范文选段：考生答复理当若何对罪犯的犯恶行为科罪。
In my opinion an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity. There have to be fixed punishment for all crimes. However, criminal laws have to provide for a minimum and maximum for the punishment and the laws also have to foresee certain cases of exemptions. An example for setting minimum and maximum penalties is Competition Law where a person being held liable of a crime under this law will be convicted to pay a fine, according to the harm caused by the violation and the profit gained by the violator through co妹妹itting the crime. As for the exemptions, in some countries the law exempts thieves stealing food during a period of famine taking into consideration the distress and hunger. Also, a person killing in self-defense will be exempted from punishment。
1. 中间思惟：对付犯法份子的科罪应当有折衷的法子，这才是包管公允公道的法子。(an intermediary position between both solutions is the perfect way to establish and ensure justice and equity。)
2. 段落布局一分为二：
①固定下来科罪的底线和上线，举例“竞争法”。
②科罪要有赦罪的特别处置。举例“饥馑时偷食品的举动”和“合法防卫”。
3. 跟尾的处置：文中加粗的部门(包括毗连词，代词等)。
3. 对策
①代词
代词包含人称代词，物主代词和一些特定的词语。代词的利用可以或许提高表达的同一性。
②同义词，反义词等意义互相联系关系的词
得当利用一些@相%b9s9h%干或不%1whM1%异@观点的词，可以或许到达整篇文章天然扩大的结果。
③毗连词
毗连词是实现段落内部表达联贯的最重要的手腕。它可以或许促进句与句，或段与段之间的逻辑瓜葛。
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